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Criminal Minds Fic---Rain 1/1

  • Jul. 30th, 2008 at 9:38 PM
stripped bare
Title: Rain 1/1
Author: derangedfangirl
Rating: PG
Fandom: Criminal Minds
Pairing/Characters: Emily Prentiss, Aaron Hotchner. Pre- Hotch/Prentiss implied

ETA:  Re-edited

Rain battered the windshield of the SUV as she glanced over at her boss’s face, impassive and stony but for his eyes. They were dark, shining conspicuously beneath his furrowed brow. A muscle jumped in his jaw, mouth a gash that seemed chiseled into his face. Her eyes drifted to his hands, clenched around the steering wheel, vice-like and white knuckled. She looked down at her own, wound tightly together, her pale skin seeming blue and bruised in the dimness of the vehicle.

“Why did it have to be children?” she murmured quietly, voice impossibly small and lost.

Hotch looked over at her for a long moment, gaze crushing.  “I don’t know.” he responded simply, softly, as they pulled to a stop. She nodded tightly, still staring at her hands.

A pregnant pause, then, “Emily? It’s not… a crime... to feel.” his voice was rough, and she glanced over at him sharply. He held her eyes, and she found herself unable to tear away. He nodded slowly and averted his eyes. She cleared her throat, jarringly loud to her own ears, and forced a small smile that probably looked more like a grimace. “I… suppose I’ll just have to get used to it.”

Hotch’s eyes jerked back to hers, pinning her, and, suddenly, he seemed older and sadder than she’d ever seen him. “If that ever happens…” he responded softly, “get out of the FBI.”


She blinked, startled. “Yes sir.”


He nodded.


Emily opened the door, dropping herself to the ground. She tipped her face toward the night sky, frigid rain striking her face with a cleansing sort of brutality. A car door slammed, footsteps, deliberate and familiar echoed behind, and a strong hand was placed on her shoulder, warm and heavy. ‘I understand.’ it said.


She lifted her own, hesitantly placing it on top of his, squeezing once; ‘Thank you.’


Rain streamed down her face in rivulets, mingled unnoticed with something warmer, because… this, this solidarity…


Slowly, painfully, the ragged edges of gaping soul-wounds began to knit together.

 Suddenly, Emily Prentiss wasn’t alone.

Comments

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[info]a_blackpanther wrote:
Jul. 31st, 2008 09:28 am (UTC)
“Emily? It’s not… a crime... to feel.”

Perfect! I can just picture Hotch starining to say that. Heartbreaking. And the ending! The image of them standing together in the rain by the car Hotch's hand on hers shoulder, Emily's on top of his, looking up, letting go...Brilliant!
[info]derangedfangirl wrote:
Jul. 31st, 2008 03:27 pm (UTC)
*grins* Thank you! I'm really glad you liked it! Yeah, what made me write it was the image of Emily standing there with her face tipped toward the sky, into the rain. So, of course I had to figure out why she was there! Hee.
[info]a_blackpanther wrote:
Jul. 31st, 2008 03:30 pm (UTC)
It's brilliant! The image is now stuck to my mind, and i'd try to make some sort of manip, but it probably wouldn't be very good.
[info]derangedfangirl wrote:
Jul. 31st, 2008 03:38 pm (UTC)
If you make that, send me a copy!!
[info]cycatryx wrote:
Jul. 31st, 2008 04:50 pm (UTC)
what a beautiful little scene! i esp. liked the last two lines. good work!!
[info]derangedfangirl wrote:
Jul. 31st, 2008 08:01 pm (UTC)
Cheers!
[info]spence_reid wrote:
Aug. 1st, 2008 01:28 am (UTC)
Beautiful. Hotch is a sweetie; I can picture him comforting her like that.
[info]derangedfangirl wrote:
Aug. 1st, 2008 03:15 am (UTC)
Thanks!
[info]luckinfovely wrote:
Aug. 1st, 2008 08:45 am (UTC)
Ok, so I never read Hotch/Prentiss fics, even though I've always been expecting them to hook up on the show for some reason. Not that I'd be opposed to the idea, mind you.

That said, I'm so glad I read this! Your Hotch is so Hotch, and your Prentiss is so... Prentiss. Which is to say, YAY you for rocking at characterization! *pins gold star*

A muscle jumped in his jaw, mouth a gash seemed chiseled into his face.

Oh. This line is so utterly perfect to describe Hotch. It's also fantastically, vividly descriptive. But this:

She tipped her face toward the night sky, frigid rain striking her face with a cleansing sort of brutality.

That is gorgeous</s>. Really and truly. There's no other word for it.

In conclusion, well done, you! This was entirely lovely. *adds a reminder to snoop around your lj to her list of things*
[info]derangedfangirl wrote:
Aug. 1st, 2008 04:07 pm (UTC)
*dances around* yayayayayayay!! *pets gold star* My... precious....

Their characterizations worried me a bit to be honest... I think my Hotch voice was channeling Gideon for a while there. Heh. But thank you so much for the lovely review!
[info]amaranth_moon wrote:
Aug. 1st, 2008 09:46 am (UTC)
mmmhhh... love that! I'm a total goner for anything which has lonely souls finding their way to each other... perfect!
[info]derangedfangirl wrote:
Aug. 1st, 2008 04:04 pm (UTC)
Thanks!
[info]nuttaxbutta wrote:
Aug. 1st, 2008 01:51 pm (UTC)
This is beautiful. I could so easily see this having happened on the show. I wish it had!
[info]derangedfangirl wrote:
Aug. 1st, 2008 04:03 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much!
[info]lizardwriter wrote:
Aug. 1st, 2008 08:29 pm (UTC)
I really like this. You wrote them well. I could definitely could hear their voices saying the words you wrote.
[info]derangedfangirl wrote:
Aug. 1st, 2008 11:55 pm (UTC)
Thanks! That means a lot. :)
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